I don't know, really. I didn't write it soon enough for time to crit it. I'm really curious what other takes people had on the story. In mine, they were sort of demonic fairies trying to destroy mankind's linear understanding of time (or something like that).

Part of it is I just can't share my story with the usual folks, so I'm writing in more of a void than I'm used to, even if critting wouldn't really help anything at this point.

This is also the first time I've written a story to a contest where the story really can't be tweaked to sub around normally without massive restructuring/rethinking.

Any interest in swapping stories? :)

Edited at 2010-05-03 04:50 am (UTC)

*hee* we both gave the factory/office a fountain, though I didn't actually describe mine.

The problem with sharing what I wrote is that you have to have read the first half of the story in Issue 10. An interesting gimmick that I'm finding exceptionally frustrating after the fact. ;)

I think my interesting characters in this piece are the ones that really take the first half to understand--primarily Paul and his mother. :)

Emailed!

And now you've heard of it ;) :) http://murkydepths.com/

If Von ever does more horror-oriented comic shorts (3-6 pages), I strongly recommend checking them out. Well, I recommend checking them out anyway :heh: I don't have a subscription, but I've gotten a few issues.

The problem with sharing what I wrote is that you have to have read the first half of the story in Issue 10. An interesting gimmick that I'm finding exceptionally frustrating after the fact. ;)

I actually got a physical copy. I'm a sucker for print. :) Though I also got a PDF of another issue or two (I helped Terry set up the PDF system).

Hmm-thanks for the lead. I'll drop the question there :)