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#fridayflash - Ouroboros

rage against darkness / or revel in its edges / endings come too soon

Earth is not the center of the universe; but it is a center. It is where we come from. And intelligence, which is not ours though we claim it. Like gravity, awareness leaks unseen. Some meta-awareness calls it heaven, imagines we are souls born from this other place. It seeds, patiently, over millennia. Our cancers are aware, fight for control, but our bodies are not ready. Testing, further evolution. They will break through and become us. Live us. And when our universe nears its end, they/we will step through to the next.

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kaolinfire
Sep. 11th, 2009 08:41 pm (UTC)
:hee:
ext_206076
Sep. 11th, 2009 09:04 pm (UTC)
Never-ending patterns...beautiful prose.

Welcome to #fridayflash!
kaolinfire
Sep. 11th, 2009 09:07 pm (UTC)
Thanks =)
(Anonymous)
Sep. 11th, 2009 09:21 pm (UTC)
Friday Flash
Nice bit of prose. Welcome to #fridayflash
~Chris
kaolinfire
Sep. 11th, 2009 09:45 pm (UTC)
Re: Friday Flash
Thanks =)
indomitable_one
Sep. 11th, 2009 11:05 pm (UTC)
OT, but got your postcard today. You suck and I'm hideously jealous of your phone. :-D
kaolinfire
Sep. 11th, 2009 11:06 pm (UTC)
:heh: I think I sent you another one a few days ago--though that one wasn't taken with my phone and I had to jump through some painful hoops due to, well, legacy issues, to get the pic on it so I could shootit :)
ext_206790
Sep. 12th, 2009 01:37 am (UTC)
"Like gravity, awareness leaks unseen" Love this line! Thanks for sharing & welcome :-)
Shannon
kaolinfire
Sep. 12th, 2009 01:42 am (UTC)
Thanks =)

Kind of cool to have this built-in distributed audience via #fridayflash.
ext_206829
Sep. 12th, 2009 06:11 am (UTC)
Nice story
Such a short piece, but packed with great stuff! I loved the first line: "Earth is not the center of the universe; but it is a center." I even thought your use of the semi-colon instead of a comma was excellent. That extra little pause that line deserves. Well done.
kaolinfire
Sep. 12th, 2009 05:26 pm (UTC)
Re: Nice story
Thank you very much. I have a thing for semi-colons, so do overuse them at times. Always glad to hear when they particularly worked for someone. :)
ext_206858
Sep. 12th, 2009 02:55 pm (UTC)
lots going on here to dig. our cancers are aware is quite a thought. ponderous write here.
kaolinfire
Sep. 12th, 2009 05:28 pm (UTC)
Much appreciated. I'm glad all the ideas don't jar--it was hard to put them all together "just so".
(Anonymous)
Sep. 14th, 2009 03:02 pm (UTC)
A Thinking Piece
Very short, but leaves one with a lot to contemplate. Almost spiritual, I'd say. Love the title, so well matched to the work, and the opening bit of haiku. Welcome to #fridayflash.
~jon
http://www.jmstrother.com
kaolinfire
Sep. 14th, 2009 03:14 pm (UTC)
Re: A Thinking Piece
Thanks much =) I was riffing a little off of the poem, trying to give it more context (I'd written it a bit earlier in the day).
(Anonymous)
Sep. 14th, 2009 07:17 pm (UTC)
This reads like prose poetry -- very lyrical and thought-provoking.

Welcome to #fridaydlash :)

~netta50
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