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Friday Flash: Letting Go

Letting Go

She tossed the words out with the kitchen trash: love had tarnished, hate had faded to a dull gray, and hope seemed more like ratty cheesecloth than the gilded kite she'd once flown her heart from. The nursing home had a limited allowance; she could let go of a few worthless words.

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mmseason
Feb. 20th, 2010 03:38 pm (UTC)
Love the imagery. You weren't inspired by my latest GUD sub? No? Then we just must breathe the same kind of metaphor. ;0)
kaolinfire
Feb. 20th, 2010 03:48 pm (UTC)
:heh: This was an initially discarded attempt to follow last week's "Show Me Your Lits" prompt, which was (at least in part) along the lines of "throwing words into the void to see if they echoed".

But it's a lovely brand of metaphor. =) I think not the sort I usually pull off, which is part of why I had to wrap it up some and share. :)

Thanks!
marisabirns.com
Feb. 20th, 2010 04:18 pm (UTC)
your friday flash
Came over from #fridayflash community.

Really liked that, with an economy of sentences, you show someone living in a way that meant "cleaning" those things/words out that didn't fit anymore.

Nicely done.

kaolinfire
Feb. 20th, 2010 04:18 pm (UTC)
Re: your friday flash
Thank you =)
bogwitch64
Feb. 20th, 2010 05:53 pm (UTC)
Beautifully done. I love flash so much. Whole worlds in few words. Thanks for sharing!
kaolinfire
Feb. 20th, 2010 05:54 pm (UTC)
Thanks for reading =) I had the first sentence up in a text editor for over a week, trying to decide what to do with it. If I could have gotten it down to 140 chars I would have submitted it to nanoism or some such, but I just couldn't...
bogwitch64
Feb. 20th, 2010 06:04 pm (UTC)
Yeah, I can't see cutting much at all from that without it suffering for it. How many characters is it now?
kaolinfire
Feb. 20th, 2010 06:07 pm (UTC)
The first sentence is 197 characters; all told it's 282. A good fit for "Short, Fast, and Deadly" perhaps. :)
bogwitch64
Feb. 20th, 2010 06:09 pm (UTC)
Oooo! I've never heard of this one. Have you heard of Every Day Fiction and Flash Me?
kaolinfire
Feb. 20th, 2010 06:12 pm (UTC)
I've published a few pieces at EDF. Have three sitting with them right now, actually. Halfway to the "okay to query us" point.

Didn't know Flash Me--will check them out. SFD is good people (good person?). :)
girlspell
Feb. 20th, 2010 06:41 pm (UTC)
Powerful imagery! Wow...You have a knack of saying so much in a few words.
kaolinfire
Feb. 20th, 2010 06:42 pm (UTC)
Thanks :D
jongibbs
Feb. 20th, 2010 07:57 pm (UTC)
Good one :)
kaolinfire
Feb. 20th, 2010 07:58 pm (UTC)
Thanks :) Just got my rejection from "Short, Fast, and Deadly". ;) Hmm hmm hmm.
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kaolinfire
Feb. 20th, 2010 11:32 pm (UTC)
Re: понравилось
Thanks =)

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